Great work, and thanks for making the much needed fork!
I have a couple of suggestions.
> Microsoft employees Josh Cohen and Vinod Valloppillil, in a competitive
> examination of Linux (The so-called "Halloween Document",
> http://www.opensource.org/halloween.html), wrote that "Linux. . .is trusted
> on mission critical applications, and - due to its open source code - has a
> long term credibility which exceeds many other competitive operating
> systems."
Good things about Linux are the focus of this announcement. Microsoft
are great to quote, but they're not the focus so don't start a paragraph
with them. The ellipsis looks suspicious. The URL clutters. The
paragraph is too long. The things people remember are: the first and
last things.
In a competitive examination (the so-called "Halloween Document"[1]),
Vinod Valloppillil and Josh Cohen of Microsoft Corporation write:
"Linux has been deployed in mission critical, commercial environments
with an excellent pool of public testimonials."
Linux is also "trusted in mission critical applications, and - due to
it's open source code - has a long term credibility which exceeds many
other competitive operating systems." We agree 100% with Microsoft.
[1] http://www.opensource.org/halloween.html
I've put the paragraph break in because it makes the first quote more
memorable. The 100% sentence is my touch :-)
My other suggestion is: go back to "NT" instead of "Windows NT"
everywhere. Everyone knows what NT is, and the Northen Telecom(tm)
trademark bit is too good to lose -- I'd love to see it enter the public
consciousness.
-- Jamie
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